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*Accidentally bumps into you*

-What I said-
Oh, I’m so sorry..!

-What I meant-
I just wanted an excuse to hold your hand
Cause even though I do the very best that I can
I can’t face this world alone
There’s too much I don’t understand

*Accidentally holds your hand*

-What I said-
Is everything alright?

-What I meant-
What should I do if I can’t tell between
The reality of life or if it’s just a dream?
I can tell the world is real enough
It’s just not as pretty as it seems

*Accidentally hugs you*

-What I said-
Are you okay?

-What I meant-
I guess I never wanted to believe
That something I helped create
That I thought was more than beautiful
Could be so capable of hate

*Accidentally kisses you*

-What I meant to say instead-
So prove me wrong
And say it’s not too late
Or too bad, or no good and that
There’s still room for one more clean slate

Because another second chance is what everybody needs
I know the world is ugly but beauty lies underneath
And if we can figure out how to set our differences apart
Maybe that would be a great way for amends to finally start

Just.
Prove to me that the world is still alive
And I’m not the only person who doesn’t want to watch it die.
This is an experimental piece. I doubt it's an original idea, but the style is what I'm experimenting on, as is the mood. I attempted to mix two things I think are very difficult to have together. That is, I was aiming for a mood of adorable and serious. So, tell me what you think? Is it at least an interesting concept?
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ShaierizNiflheimer Featured By Owner May 10, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
waaah! Its sooo nice!! >________<
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parkernoble Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Student Filmographer
I'll scream it if I had  voice to the one I truly care for cat-fish14
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PurestInnocence Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2013  Student General Artist
Storm: ....loved it....
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Hello :wave:
You have been featured in my weekly dA love for everyone! article.
Have a nice day :dalove:
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koroku-ice-princess Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Great story being told and I love the ending. "Just prove to me that the world is still alive, and I’m not the only person who doesn’t want to watch it die." This line definately means the most to me though out of the whole work "I guess I never wanted to believe that something I helped create, that I thought was more than beautiful, could be so capable of hate..." Just cuz of the experiences that I have gone through.
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Natalia852 Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2013
yes just yes. i love how you did this, the style of it really creates the outside look of adorable and cute but on the inside its truly very serious. very well done :)
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Invoking Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :meow: I'm so glad that this has been a rather well received experiment~
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Greenleaf1075 Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautifully done. I think you did a great job at mixing the emotions. Please keep up the great work!
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Invoking Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much. I will definitely try keep the momentum going!
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Greenleaf1075 Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You are welcome! That is great to hear!
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