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I don't like to feel this way
There must be something I can say
Cause I hate just watching you
When I know the pain you're going through

Listen…

You're not alone; I've been where you are
Contemplating where I'll place my next scar
Hiding razor kisses underneath long sleeves
It doesn't make it better; nothing is achieved

Believe me…

All you'll earn are the scars you've got and
The lesson learned is the lesson forgotten
You feel like no one's there, no one cares what you do
Let me put it to you straight: That is never true

I Know…

I was shunned, pushed away many times before
Then I realized it was I who had closed the door
I took a chance and opened up to the people around me
Told them of my secrets, now their love surrounds me

Look…

You're not alone; I've been where you are
And I know that life sometimes seems so hard…
But believe me, from one person to another
To make a book better, you never destroy the cover…

You are worth it...
I have been there, regrettably done that, let them keep the f*cking t-shirt. Don't need that crap.

If you do or have ever felt this way, please know that you are not alone and that other people do care for and love you <3<3
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rothus66 Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Really powerful poem, I went through this myself a while ago so its great to see people supporting each other.
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Relic-Angel Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:O_o: Huh. For some odd reason these words had me thinking of an Evanescence song. :giggle: Brilliant wording, I must say.
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NoOneKnowsWhereToGo Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist
I feel like you just lied to me....
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Invoking Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That just made me sad... I wouldn't lie to you, especially through poetry and also because I have no reason to lie to you. It is all truth. I promise. <3
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NoOneKnowsWhereToGo Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist
I'm sorry... I feel bad now, can I hug you forever? I feel like you lied to me because I've been there multiple times and people just stop listening, which makes me believe that no one cares. It didn't help that I read it when I was crying... Everything doesn't happen the same way for everyone. It may be the truth for you, but it definatly isn't for me, at least not yet... That's why I used feel instead of saying you lied to me, I chose to believe that since you're so adorable you wouldn't lie to me or purposely harm me I guess. Smile when I can't :3 Your adorableness makes me feel better <3
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Leap-of-Faythe Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is beautiful, and a really important message to get out to people. <33 I like the way it was formatted, with the little pleading phrases inserted between the stanzas. Really helped to strengthen the poem.

There's just one thing I would recommend changing, if you don't mind me pointing it out:

All you'll earn are the scars you've got and
The lesson learned is the lesson forgotten


I know that this is bad grammar, but it completely throws off your rhythm for you to say "forgotten" here instead of "forgot" Normally I wouldn't advise throwing grammar out the window, but since this is a creative endeavor and not, say, an English essay, I think it would be fairly safe to tweak things just this once. ;)

Of course it's completely up to you; if you think it's fine, then keep it, by all means. ^^ It's just a suggestion.

Other than that, really nice work! <33 Thanks for writing.
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Invoking Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, thank you soso much~!

I understand what you mean, but the way I read it in my head and out loud, it seem to fit fine. Thank you very much for the suggestion and pointing that out, but I guess it just depends on where you place the emphasis on the ends of those lines to make them work. I dunno. I'm weird x3
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Leap-of-Faythe Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome! ^^

No, you're not weird; it's probably just my weird brain pointing out something that's not actually there. xP Like I said it's completely fine that you keep it as is; everyone has their own opinion, and the writer's opinion is certainly the most important. ^^

Keep up the good work!
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PassionBread Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
It touches my heart...deeply. Btw, I am Passion Bread.
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Invoking Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you~.. And indeed you are o.O
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