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I am self-destructive.
You are the affected.

I’m a thought that’s still in motion.
You’re an idea perfected.

I’m a sacrifice without you.
But with your life, I’m injected.

I’m a thousand puzzle pieces.
You’re the way to connect it.
This is how I view the poets relationship to the artist. 

Together, we survive.
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carmennge Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I love this! I'm a writer married to an artist and this is really a perfect encapsulation of what we both do Heart 
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Invoking Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Well that's awesome ouo :meow:
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Positiveinfluence Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I like this one, man. Really well put together, and to the point. Splendid idea. 
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Invoking Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
And to think that I nearly this was a fifty plus lined monstrosity when I first started conceiving the idea for it.
Thanks, again, for your kind words.
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trippinlots Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014
Hats tipped to you.  Very touching.
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skullcrusher232 Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2013
5 stars just 5 starsSpotlight Spotlight 
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MTheLittleMonsta Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2013
this is beautiful! I really love it.
Even if it's a short poem it says so much. :heart:
This should be a DD.
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WhatDreamsAreMadeUv Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Someone nominate you for a DD.  This is beautiful.
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LittleOvertures Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2013
Beautiful <3
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TheBard26 Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2013
I agree short but still sends emotion<br / />
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saaju Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Dude!!!!! Freaking amazing, very short but wow, i love it. Imma start watching you

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Namida713 Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2013
Me gusta <3

Lovely way to think about it~
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murderinslowmotion Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2013
This is beautifully written.
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Comeonramblers Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013
I absolutely adore this!
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LovablyAwkward Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Ah, I used to despise poetry. Now, I can't help but think something poetic everyday. It's such a free way of revealing your feelings and thoughts without showing yourself.
Well, that's how I see it anyways!
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bubblybumblebee1 Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Amazing
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preimpression Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Student Digital Artist
This is gorgeous
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MissOddsocks Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
er meh gerd this is absolutely cute!
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ForgottenSea Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013
Very well written,I really like it :)
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tirasunil Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Student Writer
Very nice. :)
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Hessanite Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Perfect.
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Onyx-Dinosoar Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Wow. I really like this. It sounds beautiful.
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Clockspur Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I am both.
Could that be the reason of the chaos that comes with creation?
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phoenix-raven Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I feel this clearly portrays that relationship, Love it :heart: :D Thanks so much for writing this piece, it carries a beauty that resonates itself with the Universe //_^
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PCStorm33 Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
*is both a poet and an artist* Then what am I... *re-evaluates entire life* XD
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Cyodee Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I always thought of poets as a type of artist...:shrug:..... this is very interesting :love:... great job
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GwynOfInspiration13 Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
So beautiful and amazing!
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odDistortion Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful in it's simplicity, but you can see the thoughts behind every word.
A beautiful piece, though I do think both sides can be interchanged.
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ArtProducer95 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I'm both a writer and an artist, and I think this is a good view on them together! ^_^
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Greenleaf1075 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Fantastic! This is my boyfriend and I. I'm the writer and he's my artist, or the other way around, haha. I really feel like I give him the puzzle pieces and he puts them all together XD! Fantastic job!
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EverythingIsWords Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2013
I love this! I love it very very much. x)
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MiniLollipop Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2013
so eloquent...
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xXSpiritualArtistXx Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This describes the relationship perfectly.

I can totally relate to the poet side, being a poet myself.
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Semantic Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2013
I was left somewhat confused by this piece...

"I am self-destructive.
You are the affected.

I’m a thought that’s still in motion.
You’re an idea perfected."

You say you're describing the relationship between a poet and artist, but I'm uncertain who is depicted by each line. Is the artist "self-destructive" or the poet? Who is "affected?" It feels as though you're attempting to describe a symbiosis, but of two separate individuals working together to refine a common goal? Or maybe these are different aspects of personality within the same individual?

I just don't find the concept behind this piece to be fully fleshed out into a complete work and thinks it may need some more tinkering.

I also feel that much of the terminology used tends to be impersonal which betrays the deeply bound relationship that you seem to want to portray here.

"A thousand puzzle pieces" is a phrase in itself that seems very generic and has no resonance when reading it. Maybe if there were some added qualifiers to make it more personal like:
"Rejection, dashed to the floor like a thousand puzzle pieces.

Yet, you are there to connect them."

That example may not work for this piece, but I was just attempting to demonstrate how lines floating in a vacuum just don't have an emotional impact. That's how I felt reading this piece. There felt like some potential present, but because there was no passion present, it sounded flat like someone trying to describe an experience they've never had.

Take or leave these comments for whatever you feel they're worth and keep writing.
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Invoking Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
There is meaning in these phrases if you know how to look at them. They do not need to be fleshed out. Let me show you:

"A thousand puzzle pieces" = "A picture is worth a thousand words"

"...a thousand words" = "...a thousand puzzle pieces"

Puzzles are broken pictures. Artists create pictures. Poets give the pieces.
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Semantic Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2013
I'm sorry, but this is not a sentiment that you conveyed well in this piece.

"I’m a thousand puzzle pieces.
You’re the way to connect it."

Mixing metaphors by using puzzle pieces and "a picture is worth a thousand words" is basically assuming that an idea that is clear to the writer should also be clear to the reader.  Maybe others were able to decipher this relationship very easily, but I fail to see that interpretation from the two lines in your poem.   It's also still using generic phrases without any emotional resonance.  It just falls flat like empty platitudes.  You also have to remember, if you have to explain it outside of the piece, then it's not fully realized within the piece.

But, no worries.  Like I said, you can take my comments or leave them.  I was just letting you know my thoughts.
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Invoking Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, then. It just seems that others can understand it quite perfectly. I still appreciate your thoughts, though.
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Kinthinia Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love the almost lyrical flow to this. Beautiful. 
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Sandpiper28 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2013  Student General Artist
lol!  I have an english teacher that made us write an essay on the short story, The most dangerous game" which, by the way is about an insomniac who hunts and kills humans.  Oh, and our first essay was in the first week of school, about a person shoo goes insane and kill people after his child dies. But the worst, is that we have to diagram sentences, FOR FUN.  :screaming: :screaming: 
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Sandpiper28 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2013  Student General Artist
Some how, all the poets will endure sadistic english teachers that ignore our creativity...
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MatTtaM Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2013  Student Writer
lol, Brit Lit is a bitch. First comes 1984 by George Orwell, then comes Beowu (the actual author is unknown). What's next, One Hundred Years of Solitude by Gabriel García Márquez?
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Sandpiper28 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2013  Student General Artist
lol!  I have an english teacher that made us write an essay on the short story, The most dangerous game" which, by the way is about an insomniac who hunts and kills humans.  Oh, and our first essay was in the first week of school, about a person shoo goes insane and kill people after his child dies. But the worst, is that we have to diagram sentences, FOR FUN.  :screaming: :screaming: 
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MatTtaM Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2013  Student Writer
oh  Spam-in-a-Box: NOOO 
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Sandpiper28 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2013  Student General Artist
XD Laugh Revamp   We just started the torture that is gerund phrases, so I basically want to die whenever I go into English class.
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MatTtaM Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2013  Student Writer
lolololololololololololololol
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Sandpiper28 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2013  Student General Artist
:P 
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anila73 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Perfect. c:
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EmoRapunzel Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Sooo, we survive together o3o
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TheLuridOne1885 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2013
so very very true, I like it muchly.
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