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There's broken
Then there's shattered to the core
There's saying I don't care
Or I don't love you anymore

There's hopeless
And theres frustratingly out of reach
There are lessons left to learn
But those lessons they'll never teach

There are promises
Then there are hollow and empty lies
There are moments that you treasure
And moments you want to die

There's lonliness
And there's tired of going on
There is waiting for forever
But forever will never come...
...that title. Makes no sense.
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tamiea Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
OMG this is so beautiful. And Title make lots of sens when one reaches the end of the poem.
There are these almost impalpable emotions :)
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Zachary1991 Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2012
Very well done.
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black-angel-lover Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2012
Adding to favourites..... I am really conecting to thise piece.
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RavenPaw6003 Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
i love it, its beautiful, really nice job
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Dessert-rose Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:iconrlytearplz: This is beautiful!
"There is waiting for forever
But forever will never come..."
I LOVE that line!!! it's just brilliant, well done! :clap:
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Invoking Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so very much! <3<3
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Dessert-rose Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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12redroses Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2012
I feel like everything you said in this poem is true. And that kind of makes me sad. Very good tho. :heart:
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Invoking Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It is sad but true, yes..
Thank you very much<3
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12redroses Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2012
You're welcome.
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SuicideNoteXIII Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
A girl asked a guy if he thought she was pretty and
he
said no. She asked him if he would want to be with her forever and
he
said no. She then asked him if she were to leave would he cry, and
............once
again he replied with a no. She had heard enough. As she walked... See Moreaway, tears streaming down her f......ace the...
... See Moreboy grabbed her arm and said.... You're not pretty
you're beautiful. Idon't want to be with you forever. I NEED to be
with you forever. And Iwouldn't cry if you walked away...I'd die...
♥♥ ~~THE END~~ ♥♥.......Isn't that sweet? Tonight at midnight your
true love willrealize they like you. Something good will happen to
you at 1:00-4:00pm tomorrow, it could be anywhere on IM or email,
outside of school,anywhere! Get ready for the biggest shock of your
life. If you breakthis chain letter you will be cursed with 10
relationship problems forthe next ten years. If you post this to 15
pages in 15 minutes, you're safe.
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SoberDOGS Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
We've already found true love :|
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MelancholicHeathen Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2012
The title doesn't make any sense...but that doesn't mean its not an excellent poem. XD
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Invoking Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Lol thank you x3
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