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I am a missing piece. Something that someone needs.
But at the same time, I feel so incomplete.
I’ve wandered way too far, wondered for far too long
Am I a missing piece? Or a piece that won’t belong?

Is it possible I’m damaged and not missing at all?
That I’m just as dysfunctional as everybody else?
Pretending to be perfect never softened a single fall.
But neither did admitting that you’re broken and flawed.

A broken missing piece. Is that all I’m meant to be?
There is no master plan that includes the likes of me.
Being all alone, it’s a hurt that will not cease.
A hundred thousand years from now
I’ll still be
A missing
Piece.
I wish I could explain what had me writing this, but the feeling has left me and embedded itself in the words. I hope that they're a good enough explanation.
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:iconjolobogzkie711:
awesome...i feel this poem
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:iconovertall98:
eoe, i wish i could write like that
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:iconovertall98:
im sure it will come back to you, something that awesome cannot remain lost forever :D
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Invoking Jun 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I wish I hadn't lost the ability to.
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Usachan100 Apr 19, 2013  Student General Artist
This is beautiful. It made me cry a little. It also reminds me of Kingdom hearts. XD
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realARTIZT Mar 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is how i've felt for a short while...and then again..and then I noticed it comes in waves. lol I think this is one of my foremost favorites of all the others you've submitted in the past. Great use of words!!!! Thanks for submitting this to #SayItHere!
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funkeysanddance Feb 22, 2013  Student Writer
This critique is on behalf of :iconpoeticalcondition:

First of all, poetry like this is so amazing because it can relate to so many different things and it sort of takes the reader to their own feeling of that.

The rhyme scheme here is also quite beautiful. It really makes the poem flow so well.

Usually I would say not to be repetitive with words like "the missing piece", but with this form, it works really well. It adds the emphasis on there without having an annoying tone. So great work with that too!

Overall, there really isn't much I can say you should work on with this piece. Honestly, it seems perfect to me. Such a lovely piece!
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17BloodWolf Feb 19, 2013  Student General Artist
:tighthug:
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chancerox Feb 19, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
this takes exactly what i needed like a drug :) beautiful, you're so talented.
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