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I am a missing piece. Something that someone needs.
But at the same time, I feel so incomplete.
I’ve wandered way too far, wondered for far too long
Am I a missing piece? Or a piece that won’t belong?

Is it possible I’m damaged and not missing at all?
That I’m just as dysfunctional as everybody else?
Pretending to be perfect never softened a single fall.
But neither did admitting that you’re broken and flawed.

A broken missing piece. Is that all I’m meant to be?
There is no master plan that includes the likes of me.
Being all alone, it’s a hurt that will not cease.
A hundred thousand years from now
I’ll still be
A missing
Piece.
I wish I could explain what had me writing this, but the feeling has left me and embedded itself in the words. I hope that they're a good enough explanation.
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jolobogzkie711 Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2013  Student
awesome...i feel this poem
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Overtall98 Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013  Student
eoe, i wish i could write like that
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Overtall98 Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2013  Student
im sure it will come back to you, something that awesome cannot remain lost forever :D
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:iconinvoking:
Invoking Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I wish I hadn't lost the ability to.
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Usachan100 Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Student General Artist
This is beautiful. It made me cry a little. It also reminds me of Kingdom hearts. XD
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realARTIZT Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
This is how i've felt for a short while...and then again..and then I noticed it comes in waves. lol I think this is one of my foremost favorites of all the others you've submitted in the past. Great use of words!!!! Thanks for submitting this to #SayItHere!
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funkeysanddance Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Student Writer
This critique is on behalf of :iconpoeticalcondition:

First of all, poetry like this is so amazing because it can relate to so many different things and it sort of takes the reader to their own feeling of that.

The rhyme scheme here is also quite beautiful. It really makes the poem flow so well.

Usually I would say not to be repetitive with words like "the missing piece", but with this form, it works really well. It adds the emphasis on there without having an annoying tone. So great work with that too!

Overall, there really isn't much I can say you should work on with this piece. Honestly, it seems perfect to me. Such a lovely piece!
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17BloodWolf Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2013  Student Digital Artist
:tighthug:
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chancerox Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
this takes exactly what i needed like a drug :) beautiful, you're so talented.
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I am here on behalf of #PoeticalCondition to provide my critique:

I like this poem. The rhyming that you have used in it is good, and for the most part the story presented seems clear. The concept of a missing piece does make itself known in this work and I applaud you for your effort. Good job.

The only improvements I could recommend is working on the second stanza. The word "flawed" seems out of place in it. Because the meter's well handled in the remaining stanzas, and the second simply breaks that pace.

If you can manage that, then its good to go - this is a wonderful piece you have written honestly. I hope to see more of these works. :)
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anazura Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013
not to be cheesy or anything, but someday you'll figure out the puzzle
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:iconinvoking:
Invoking Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
A belief that I will always hold on to~ Thanks.
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Seize-the-Stars Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
A brilliant and deeply insightful poem!
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Invoking Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you~
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Val3DaShorty Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013
I Love it!!! :worship:
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:iconinvoking:
Invoking Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much <3 ouo
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Semblade Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013
beautiful
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Invoking Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much~
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hybridgothica Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
:heart:
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TheLunarDragon Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This Critique is on behalf of :iconpoeticalcondition:

This was a very well written piece, I particularly enjoyed how you made the end of the poem fade away just as the feeling of this poem has. That was very clever. The metaphors were a bit on the predictable side but nonetheless enjoyable, and you picked a topic that will resonate with most of the readers. Something that most people go through at some point. All I can say as far as pointers, is to think a little more outside the box with the metaphors, think of a comparison that people haven't used before. :)
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YourDyingNightmare Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
thank you for writing this.. i definitely relate to it very well..
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Invoking Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
That is my duty as a poet. I'm glad that you can draw relation from it. <3
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YourDyingNightmare Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:-)
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vespera Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:

How is your :iconglory-be-project: coming along? :D
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Invoking Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Vey difficult, actually. I'm discovering that my best (in my opinion) work comes out when I abstain from writing for a while and give myself time to think of some new thing that I wish to write about.
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infinitelove143 Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
My best works seem to happen when I write on-the-fly hehe
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vespera Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Have you been doing any brainstorming on the days you aren't writing? :D

I've been doing a lot of freewrites and going back days later to pull poems out of it.
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Invoking Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I have been, but I always end up disliking them days later and starting completely over. It's a frustrating vicious cycle, but the occasional poem does surface every now and then.
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vespera Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh I always do that with everything :D
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TotalWeirdo666 Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013
This is beautiful!
I think there's a certain Shel Silverstein book you ought to read....
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Invoking Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hmhm~ I actually have read that book~ I absolutely love it, too x3
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KuraiTenshiV Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist
It's good and many many a night have I sat and pondered on those very thoughts.
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Invoking Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I hear you ono
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Xhiao-Yuu Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is so beautiful. It really conveys a clear message. I feel like this a lot, but I always try to remember that life will continue despite the fact that I feel alone and that I must retain hope for the future >W<

Once again, this is a stunning piece ^^
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Invoking Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much~ And yes, you must retain hope. It's all we have sometimes <3
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Xhiao-Yuu Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
True! >W< Keep up the great work, I've read some of your other poems and wow, you are amazing! owo
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Invoking Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
THank you so much~ o3o
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LRiker Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Definitely felt what compelled you to write this, I really liked how you placed so much emphasis on "A missing Piece." with changing up the font, played well into the emotion of the verses. kudos.
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Invoking Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much. That's very much appreciated.
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HuaiYin Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Student General Artist
:tighthug: I hope you'll be able to find where you belong someday. Just because you're missing doesn't mean you can't be found.
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Invoking Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
d'awww~ thank you so much~ <3
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HuaiYin Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Student General Artist
^^ no problem!
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NoOneKnowsWhereToGo Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist
I feel like this alot. :/ I'm starting to think I did it to myself...
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Invoking Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm sorry to hear that ono ... :iconhugplz:
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NoOneKnowsWhereToGo Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2013  Hobbyist
<3 I would hug you if I could
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Invoking Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I know <3 ouo
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NoOneKnowsWhereToGo Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Hobbyist
:3 I really wish I could teleport <3
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Invoking Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ha, yeah, me too.
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NoOneKnowsWhereToGo Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Hobbyist
:/ After today I really need a hug.
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