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Lay awake, I'm robbed of sleep
I hear the raindrops tap the street
Forgetting all I've fallen for, I can't go on
I can't be more

Hidden behind tapestries
Adorned with painful memories
Slowly realize what you've done, I've lost it all
I've come undone

A fallen angel at your feet
A broken mess at your mercy
Heartless in my time of need, you walked away
You watched me bleed

Holding out for fate unknown
A missing piece, an empty home
Living life with no one there, I know I'm lost
But I don't care

Within the boundaries of myself
Crying out for someone's help
Wishing for, with all my heart
They'll stop the pain and light the dark

A fallen angel at my feet
Broken, shattered just like me
I take her hand and grip it tight
We'll last forever in the light…
...and gives it meaning.
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Nikkaliah Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You are a beautiful writer, and poet. I've been reading through your works, and it's just some of the most beautiful literature I have ever had the privilege to read. You don't just print words on paper, you paint a portrait. I'm trying desperately to find the right words to express how much I loved this, and your other works, but I don't think that there are words strong enough in the English language. Yet somehow, you seem to be able to find words strong enough to express emotions such as love, and sadness, and hope. Which so many, myself included, will probably never be able to accomplish. So, enough prattling on. I just wanted to tell you that you're, well, awesome....... Clap  Hug
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Invoking Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
As of right now, you've rendered me speechless. All I can say is this: Thank you.
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Nikkaliah Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
haha no problem,Sweating a little...
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dashita-tichou Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
How do I fav it?! Stupid computer...

This is really meaningful, the last stanza especially is my favorite.
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Invoking Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Hmhm~ you just click that fave button at the top right of your screen...

And thank you very much, I'm glad you find meaning in the words I've written.. :meow:
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dashita-tichou Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I figured it out! XD I'm such an idiot...
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Invoking Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Hmhmhm~ it happens to the best of us ouO Thank you very much :meow:
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dashita-tichou Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Welcome! It's a really good piece, it deserves the favorites!
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NoOneKnowsWhereToGo Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Hobbyist
I really wanna hug you! And I can relate to this o-o I really do not know how to feel about this...
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Invoking Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
D'aww, thank you.. well, I hope it's a good feeling ^^
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NoOneKnowsWhereToGo Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Hobbyist
I can't really decide if it's good or bad but that's okay :) You're welcome! ^^
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Golden-Leaves Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
"... Wishing for, with all my heart
They'll stop the pain and light the dark

A fallen angel at my feet
Broken, shattered just like me
I take her hand and grip it tight
We'll last forever in the light..."

So very beautiful. :) I like it.
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Invoking Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, my good person. I'm very glad you do :meow:
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Espada-Kitsuki Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Well... well done. This is one of those pieces of poetry that attempt to describe love, emotion, etc, but this is one of those few that actually seem to get to me somehow. The others... they need a bit of work, but they all hold something. Just not much that I've really been able to remember.

Excellent phrasing and wording. The images that run through my head when I read this are endless. Such visualisation! This means that you've certainly done a good job making sure that the reader can see what is going on.

The subject that you've chosen. That is one that many try to address and eventually realize they cannot, because they haven't grasped either the art of poetry or the meaning of love itself. But this is actually very good--it's not a theme you see everyday on Disney channel and all that stuff, it's deeper. It has some sort of darker meaning, and in the end it leaves the reader impacted and mystified by the meaning behind this word that cannot be understood without someone to give it meaning.

... and the description? Brilliant. First the title appears above and then you read the description, BAM. It comes together.

Anyways, well done!
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Invoking Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Why, thank you very much. I am truly flattered by your critique, and I do draw a some good feedback from it, so again, thank you so very much, my good person!
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SplitNinja Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I agree with you.^^
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Invoking Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Hm, why thank you, my good person :P
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SplitNinja Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're welcome.:D Love needs ti find you, not the other way around.
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