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I am broken. I’m a waste.
Tell me something I don’t know
Say it to my face

You think you know me better
‘Cause of things you don’t remember
You’re trying to make me hurt
My self-esteem’s in the dirt

Pick out all my flaws and laugh at every  one
I’m just a stubborn kid with a loaded gun
In the middle of the desert
Taking shots at the sun

But my body is the M16

My mouth is the trigger
My lungs; the magazine
And if you can’t already see
I’m about ready
To go on a killing spree
If you can’t shut up long enough
To hear what I have to say

Then I’m locked and loaded
Have a nice day.
Shut up and listen to me. Please.
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Phan5everx2 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Love it. The ladt line is so sassy-and done. I can see someone, battered and bloody spitting "Shut up and listen to me. I'm tired of your shit" amazing.
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LylliaAshlyn42 Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautifully written, just like the rest.
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artistic-heart13 Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Serious but funny at the end. One thing; did you mean to put a ";" after lungs or a ","? Maybe it's just me...Anyway, very relatable and well-written.
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K-hione Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
It's very good. A lot of feelings. 
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songbird0705 Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love this :3 
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X3beyondthesunx3 Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2013   Writer
wicked awesome.
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NoOneKnowsWhereToGo Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2013  Hobbyist
I'll always listen to you and I get like that sometimes.
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Lynnae-Madison Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Cool poem! ^^
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