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Did you really think,
That taking the cowards way out,
Would prove anything,
Except all of our worst fears?

Did you even think,
About the ones that you have now?
And the pain that you'd bring,
If you were to leave them all here...?

Do you really think,
You're life is just so horribly unbearable,
That you need to take this knife,
And do something you know is terrible?!

How many times,
Have I told you it isn't worth it?
How selfish of you,
To expect your life to be picture perfect.
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infernus8sit4amet6 Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I can somewhat agree with your point of view, this is a great piece, but i dont think this would help a suicidal personat all if not make it a bit worse, thats coming from experiance, I have attempted it before and seriosly thought about it recently. I still like this, its avery good piece of work.
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spoonthesockmonkey Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
i disagree with your point of veiw, but still think its a great piece
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Invoking Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I can respect that, and thank you very much for your honesty <3
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spoonthesockmonkey Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
of course, thank you for sharing your work
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LemonumNade Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I don't think that this would help anyone who is contemplating suicide. The feel I get from this is that someone is speaking into a situation where they do not have full knowledge. What people who are close to suicide really need is someone to make them feel that they are worth life. Calling someone selfish for struggling so much with life that they would even think of ending it is not fair to that person, it would (most likely) cause them to feel worse. This keeps making me think of someone who wants to help but really doesn't know the best way.
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infernus8sit4amet6 Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
These are my thoughts exactly.
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Invoking Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It isn't fair for the person to even think about ending their life without trying to find proper help first. It isn't fair that they feel that way in the first place. It's not fair to anybody.Life just isn't fair. So in a way, it is selfish of them. Everybody walks through hell at one point or another. If they're not brave enough to face their problems or issues head on, and they resort to this tragic course of action, then yes. That alone justifies this piece. Now, please, I do not mean to come off as harsh or anything, I'm very thankful for your honest opinion on my work <3 much appreciated, my good person.
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Jackie0527 Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2012
I agree with you. Life is unfair and your piece speaks truth. Suicide is just the easy, dumb, and selfish way out of a problem. Nothing in life is easy. We can't just give up. I have depression and I have had thoughts of suicide many times before, but I never once tried to commit suicide because, in my opinion, only the cowards, stupid, and selfish people try it. I am not a coward, stupid, nor selfish. I am smart, fearless, and I love my friends and family. If I were to write a piece on suicide, it would sound a lot like Invoking 's piece. This is from the POV of a person with depression that will never give up and will face whatever life throws at her.
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Invoking Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm sorry to hear you've felt as such before, or perhaps still do. One can never truly put those feelings away... I am glad you have the same view as me, as you appear to be one of few. Thank you for your support, my good person, and I wish you the best of luck <3
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LemonumNade Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I appreciate how much thought you appear to put into each response, and although I disagree with the message, I understand your point and respect it.
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Invoking Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for understanding :P That is all I ask.
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PhoenixCursed Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Suicide isn't the coward's way out. That is a common misconception and unless you have ever been depressed (not "really sad", but actually diagnosed with severe depression by a psychiatrist) then I don't think you should write about someone who commits suicide as a coward. This is an interesting perspective though, and other than a few choppy areas, a good quality.
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exactlywhatiseem Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2012
I really don't like the message here, especially calling it "the coward's way out". It does a good job of matching the "suicide is selfish" mindset, but at the same time it seems to promote it. Most people who attempt suicide have serious problems, either with their past or themselves. Others are seeing it as being helpful (which it it's not, but they aren't thinking the same way and they do feel that what they are doing is best in some cases). I'd really suggest doing some form of research if you didn't know this already.

Sentiment aside, the meter works well, though the punctuation seems a bit off.
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Invoking Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
In no way, shape, or form do I, nor would I ever promote the act of suicide. Though it is a fact that those people who attempt have serious problems with the past or themselves, it is because they don't know how to fix them or are too afraid to try to fix them. Hence the 'cowards way out' of dealing with any problems. Life is full of problems. You can't kill yourself for everything that goes wrong. I have done research, and have actually lived through it. I respect your point of view on this, and am very glad to get some constructive criticism and your own personal thoughts. Please, no harm or offense was intended in these words. I'm genuinely thankful <3
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exactlywhatiseem Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2012
I never said you did, and I never said you should. I do not, nor would I.
I really just don't like calling it cowardly. I think it takes a kind of bravery (not that it's a good kind). See, the thing is (and I don't know if this is how you/the person you're referring to felt) is that it seems like the answer.
I'm glad to see that you're respectful off differing opinions; this tends to be a touchy subject. I don't intend to come across as harsh, and I'm nowhere near an expert.
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Sebby1992 Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Just putting some words of wisdom in this.I have suffered through sucide, because a friend did it and succed. I also at one point in my life thought it was the anwser. It is in no shape or form brave in my option. I was a coward, for running away from my problems. I feel it takes true bravery to face them, and to live through what is causing you pain. That is true bravery, feeling like your in hell, and living through it. Once again thats my point of view. I also do agree that it may seem like the anwser to them,but it never is no madder what mindset. I greive for my friend everyday, and it is selfish to kill yourself :/
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exactlywhatiseem Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2012
I'm sorry about your friend and what you had to go through; it must have been impossible.

Look, I'm not trying to invalidate anyone's opinion. I'm also not commenting on what is bravery. I've said all I need to say, and I stand by it. If anyone would like to talk more about this, note me. I don't think Invoking would like much more of me in the comments since this isn't much about the poem anymore.
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Sebby1992 Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm dealing with it best I can.

I know ^.^ Like you I also said what I needed to say. I just wanted to disscuss that is all! If you really feel the need to note me after this then please do. (Also I would like to just point out that you did say it took a certain type of bravery before I popped in, so if you don't want to comment on it then I wouldn't have said something about it in the first place XD )
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xpanicattheps3x Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is beautiful :heart: I love the message. Have you ever considered turning this into song lyrics? haha c:
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Invoking Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you <3 and yes, I have considered it. I'd -love- to make everything I write into a song. I just lack the technical skills to do so :P
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xpanicattheps3x Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I know exactly how you feel. but yeah you're totally talented. maybe you'll figure something out eventually :3
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Invoking Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh yes, it's definitely on my list of things to do. Thank you for your support ^///^ it means a lot to me <3
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SoulSkrix Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2012  Hobbyist Filmographer
I slightly disagree, but good work none the less :P
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Invoking Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:P Thank you <3
Just out of plain curiosity, would you kindly tell me what it is you disagree about..?
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SoulSkrix Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2012  Hobbyist Filmographer
Just the selfishness part xP
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Invoking Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Ah, okay.
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TenderRevenge Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I needed this right now! Sitting beside my ex husband in the hospital atm because he shot himself in the head at 4am this morning.
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Invoking Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh.. I'm so sorry to hear that 3': ... :hug:
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TenderRevenge Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! It was so traumatic bc I had chased after him and didn't make it until it was too late and they say he should recover fully but seeing him do that, it was the most horrific thing ever and I've had a million feelings since! I really needed this! I said that already I know.
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JoysAngel Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2012
this is amazing <3
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Invoking Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much <3<3
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JoysAngel Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2012
its okay <3
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