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Acceptance by Invoking Acceptance by Invoking
I hate knowing all the answers on the test, but purposely failing so people won't make fun of me for being a 'nerd'. I hate having to hide the fact that I'm a poet at heart from my best 'friends' because they're jocks and poetry is 'lame' to them. I hate it when my parents feel like they need to scream for me to understand anything. I hate being different. But I can't help that I am.
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This is, once again, an adapted piece from my gallery. "Acceptance" ([link]) is the premiere piece of my gallery and one that I am very proud of. To me, it is the most raw emotion I have ever put into a poem before. And I hope that this adaptation helps those who read it understand that emotion a little better.

I also hope that the veiwers of this piece, both in its original and adapted forms, can find some comfort in the knowledge that they are not the only ones who hurt this way. You are loved <3

The font I used is called "ForbiddenLands"

Background Image: Google Images. Thank you Google <3

*EDIT 1/24/13*
I forgot to mention that there's a little easter egg up there in the right hand corner. My first and last names are there, because that's where I would writet them if I were actually in school. The '3rd Period' is the period I have my literature class in, English 12. I'm a highschool senior. The date on there is just the date when I finished creating this adaptation. That's about it. Your welcome <3
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pervisage Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2014  Student Writer
To accept or to deny, that is the question.
what would it take to make someone who feels lost, miserable and misunderstood smile? Would it take a hug from someone who the person values more than life, more than his or her life's? Would it take a simple act of kindness from a stranger?
I was a victim of rape, I was a victim of suicide attempt, I was a victim of depression and I don't regret being the victim of those events that not only scared my life but improved it immeasurably.

Thanks to my cousin who raped me I got interested in psychology and found out that he never ever left loved by his father, so in order to fill the void that is his heart he decided to spend his anger, loneliness and pain in me, I have never felt so blessed by having parents who love me and will do everything in their power and even beyond that to guarantee and assure that I won't stop smiling. And because of that I will shun or deny people who are suffering, because it's through suffering that a person can become TRULY miserable.

The first attempt I had in order to kill myself was when I was 8 years , I hated and loathed every single "nickname" others gave me "freak" "incompetent" "useless" "imbecile" "ignorant" among other wonderful names other "normal" people gave me.
just when I was about to jump out of my two story tall house I felt something. I felt that I will be giving them REASON to call me that, and I stopped. I shall not give them the satisfaction of being right, I shall prove them all wrong. And I did, I made the biggest bully in my school cower in fear when I became the best friend of his younger brother, I tamed the strongest bully in middle school when I had his future in my hands after he threatened me.

When my father left me and my mother when I was 10 I felt my life, reality and heart brake, I have never felt so alone and cold in my life, I lost 40 pounds in less than 3 months. But then I learned that now I had a little sister, that same day I made an oath that I will never let my sister experience the overpowering noise of silence, the incandescent heat of solitude and the blood chilling coldness of the lack of love.

I am a no one, but I am a no one that has a everything to give and a nothing to regret
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MissOddsocks Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
this,my friend, is amazing. It about sums up what most kids our age feel.Tears 
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nounouisawesome Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013
i except you!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
note me lets be friends!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1
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prettyflour Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Hey there,

Prettyflour here on behalf of :iconpoeticalcondition: with the critique you requested.

After reading this, I checked out "Acceptance" so that I could experience it both ways. For me, I enjoyed this version. At first glance I noticed the lined paper which makes me think of school. I think that lends a nice companionship for the content of the poem. Speaking of the content, I have no doubt that young men and women will find this relatable. I would guess the most people have felt this way in one form or another, at least, I did.

I find the poem successful. The words are powerful and everything you used to make this more visually stimulating (the font, the letter format, the little splotches of ink, ect...) all work well together.

What you did here was, in fact, quite different from the other version for me. And I like the fact that the same set of words had a different feel within each poem. Great job!

I hope this was helpful. Thank you and have a great night!
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TheLunarDragon Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This Critique is on behalf of :iconpoeticalcondition:

I find myself at a loss of words for this piece. I felt my eyes well up... I felt memories of my school years rushing back.... I have felt everything in this poem, and I think a lot of other will too. This is a piece that will resonate well with the majority of its readers, and because of that I find this to be a phenomenal piece of writing.

I could honestly read this poem over and over again, it's that good....
Unlike my colleague I do not have a bias against Prosetry and found this peace to be a gem among the genre, perhaps he should look at this piece as Prosetry's Redemption!

5/5

Bravo!
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Invoking Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much. I am very happy that you took the time to write this and argue the other side. The way it's viewed, and the dynamics of poetry overall, are typically up to the reader, though the writer can only hint in the way it is picked up and recieved by the reader. I thought prosetry was a good way to make it feel more like an authentic thing, like it's happening now, even though it was written a while back. Again, thank you very much.
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm here on behalf of #PoeticalCondition to provide my critique

No point talking about Originality and Technique, so I'll skip those.

Vision:

For the experiences that you've had, I do give you credit just to pour yourself out the way that you have. Its raw, and it is definitely something written in a state of dire straits. And, keeping that in mind, its a poem that describes serious emotions and inner turmoil. And you've certainly come a long way....

Impact:

... but I felt nothing in this poem that stood out. Unlike your original, this is hollow. It kills the purpose that the original had.

And mind you, I read both. Frankly speaking, I read the original Acceptance poem three times.... scratch that, four times... and this particular stanza:

I've got my back pressed to the fences...
I'm sorry that I'm such a hinderance...
I long to feel some kind of presence...
Something more than this hated essence..
Suffered from my unjust sentence...
All I ask for from this world...
Is a little bit of pure acceptance...


Reached out to me... that is raw... that was heartfelt.

If this poem that you've written was in that poetic format, with the same font style but in the original's style of presentation, I'd like that. Prosetry didn't help me in liking this poem - it was only a hindrance.

I don't know about anyone else, but that's my take on this poem. The subject matter... is handled well. Its very strong willed.

So here's my score:

Vision: 5
Originality: 5 (since I've felt the same way, its natural)
Technique: 3.5 because you've done well with the layering and the pen-on-paper feeling. The prosetry approach is my own bias towards this poem.
Impact: 4.5

Well done. You still got a 4.5 overall. Its a good poem in any case.
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Invoking Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much for that. Honestly, I wasn't sure about the prosetry either, but I figured I'd give it a shot rather than not and just wonder.
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
put it in poetic form, prosetry doesn't suit it.

Stay happy, cheers.
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menotmyselfori Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013
Ooo, I like this! Especially how you kept the poem in one piece, instead of separating the lines, it really helped pull it together and show how it's a rush of emotion *claps*
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