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I hate knowing all the answers on the test, but purposely failing so people won't make fun of me for being a 'nerd'. I hate having to hide the fact that I'm a poet at heart from my best 'friends' because they're jocks and poetry is 'lame' to them. I hate it when my parents feel like they need to scream for me to understand anything. I hate being different. But I can't help that I am.
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This is, once again, an adapted piece from my gallery. "Acceptance" ([link]) is the premiere piece of my gallery and one that I am very proud of. To me, it is the most raw emotion I have ever put into a poem before. And I hope that this adaptation helps those who read it understand that emotion a little better.

I also hope that the veiwers of this piece, both in its original and adapted forms, can find some comfort in the knowledge that they are not the only ones who hurt this way. You are loved <3

The font I used is called "ForbiddenLands"

Background Image: Google Images. Thank you Google <3

*EDIT 1/24/13*
I forgot to mention that there's a little easter egg up there in the right hand corner. My first and last names are there, because that's where I would writet them if I were actually in school. The '3rd Period' is the period I have my literature class in, English 12. I'm a highschool senior. The date on there is just the date when I finished creating this adaptation. That's about it. Your welcome <3
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pervisage Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2014  Student Writer
To accept or to deny, that is the question.
what would it take to make someone who feels lost, miserable and misunderstood smile? Would it take a hug from someone who the person values more than life, more than his or her life's? Would it take a simple act of kindness from a stranger?
I was a victim of rape, I was a victim of suicide attempt, I was a victim of depression and I don't regret being the victim of those events that not only scared my life but improved it immeasurably.

Thanks to my cousin who raped me I got interested in psychology and found out that he never ever left loved by his father, so in order to fill the void that is his heart he decided to spend his anger, loneliness and pain in me, I have never felt so blessed by having parents who love me and will do everything in their power and even beyond that to guarantee and assure that I won't stop smiling. And because of that I will shun or deny people who are suffering, because it's through suffering that a person can become TRULY miserable.

The first attempt I had in order to kill myself was when I was 8 years , I hated and loathed every single "nickname" others gave me "freak" "incompetent" "useless" "imbecile" "ignorant" among other wonderful names other "normal" people gave me.
just when I was about to jump out of my two story tall house I felt something. I felt that I will be giving them REASON to call me that, and I stopped. I shall not give them the satisfaction of being right, I shall prove them all wrong. And I did, I made the biggest bully in my school cower in fear when I became the best friend of his younger brother, I tamed the strongest bully in middle school when I had his future in my hands after he threatened me.

When my father left me and my mother when I was 10 I felt my life, reality and heart brake, I have never felt so alone and cold in my life, I lost 40 pounds in less than 3 months. But then I learned that now I had a little sister, that same day I made an oath that I will never let my sister experience the overpowering noise of silence, the incandescent heat of solitude and the blood chilling coldness of the lack of love.

I am a no one, but I am a no one that has a everything to give and a nothing to regret
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MissOddsocks Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
this,my friend, is amazing. It about sums up what most kids our age feel.Tears 
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nounouisawesome Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013
i except you!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
note me lets be friends!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1
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prettyflour Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Hey there,

Prettyflour here on behalf of :iconpoeticalcondition: with the critique you requested.

After reading this, I checked out "Acceptance" so that I could experience it both ways. For me, I enjoyed this version. At first glance I noticed the lined paper which makes me think of school. I think that lends a nice companionship for the content of the poem. Speaking of the content, I have no doubt that young men and women will find this relatable. I would guess the most people have felt this way in one form or another, at least, I did.

I find the poem successful. The words are powerful and everything you used to make this more visually stimulating (the font, the letter format, the little splotches of ink, ect...) all work well together.

What you did here was, in fact, quite different from the other version for me. And I like the fact that the same set of words had a different feel within each poem. Great job!

I hope this was helpful. Thank you and have a great night!
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TheLunarDragon Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This Critique is on behalf of :iconpoeticalcondition:

I find myself at a loss of words for this piece. I felt my eyes well up... I felt memories of my school years rushing back.... I have felt everything in this poem, and I think a lot of other will too. This is a piece that will resonate well with the majority of its readers, and because of that I find this to be a phenomenal piece of writing.

I could honestly read this poem over and over again, it's that good....
Unlike my colleague I do not have a bias against Prosetry and found this peace to be a gem among the genre, perhaps he should look at this piece as Prosetry's Redemption!

5/5

Bravo!
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Invoking Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much. I am very happy that you took the time to write this and argue the other side. The way it's viewed, and the dynamics of poetry overall, are typically up to the reader, though the writer can only hint in the way it is picked up and recieved by the reader. I thought prosetry was a good way to make it feel more like an authentic thing, like it's happening now, even though it was written a while back. Again, thank you very much.
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm here on behalf of #PoeticalCondition to provide my critique

No point talking about Originality and Technique, so I'll skip those.

Vision:

For the experiences that you've had, I do give you credit just to pour yourself out the way that you have. Its raw, and it is definitely something written in a state of dire straits. And, keeping that in mind, its a poem that describes serious emotions and inner turmoil. And you've certainly come a long way....

Impact:

... but I felt nothing in this poem that stood out. Unlike your original, this is hollow. It kills the purpose that the original had.

And mind you, I read both. Frankly speaking, I read the original Acceptance poem three times.... scratch that, four times... and this particular stanza:

I've got my back pressed to the fences...
I'm sorry that I'm such a hinderance...
I long to feel some kind of presence...
Something more than this hated essence..
Suffered from my unjust sentence...
All I ask for from this world...
Is a little bit of pure acceptance...


Reached out to me... that is raw... that was heartfelt.

If this poem that you've written was in that poetic format, with the same font style but in the original's style of presentation, I'd like that. Prosetry didn't help me in liking this poem - it was only a hindrance.

I don't know about anyone else, but that's my take on this poem. The subject matter... is handled well. Its very strong willed.

So here's my score:

Vision: 5
Originality: 5 (since I've felt the same way, its natural)
Technique: 3.5 because you've done well with the layering and the pen-on-paper feeling. The prosetry approach is my own bias towards this poem.
Impact: 4.5

Well done. You still got a 4.5 overall. Its a good poem in any case.
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Invoking Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much for that. Honestly, I wasn't sure about the prosetry either, but I figured I'd give it a shot rather than not and just wonder.
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
put it in poetic form, prosetry doesn't suit it.

Stay happy, cheers.
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menotmyselfori Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013
Ooo, I like this! Especially how you kept the poem in one piece, instead of separating the lines, it really helped pull it together and show how it's a rush of emotion *claps*
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Invoking Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Why, thank you very much~ o3o
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irishtmike Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013
I went from crying to surviving
from almost dying to just surviving
then i started lying and hiding '
it took me a while to get to living
it took a lot of writing before i stopped fighting myself
now i am striving
I am in the light and no more faking
I am giving more than i am taking
If i was you i would be the nerd
Be a wolf, forget the herd
Your holding yourself back when you could fly like a bird
I wish i was a nerd
Poetry is an art and be thankful you can do it because your smart
I know i don't know all the details but slow down to walk with the snails
Be proud of being different and sail
Let the cool kids chase there own tail
While focus on succeeding they fail
Well dude nobody knows your story like you do
The people who wont accept that your different, they don't deserve you
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Invoking Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
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irishtmike Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013
i did not expect that reaction, so whats on ur mind right now after reading it
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Dylan40 Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Nice poem. For the most part I didn't have any issues back in High School. I had a couple of friends and we did our own thing. Even though the few good friends I did have we had differences in interests and other things. Even so we still got along.

I also had problems with other people in my class or other classes about other things as well on how I acted. Apparently people hate a "goody goody two shoes" or whatever the saying is. Whatever happens your last year of school, whatever happens afterward, don't let anyone change you. If your friends that you don't except you for who you are then they are not your friends. You will find good friends somewhere in your life that may make yall almost inseparable.

For your parents I can't say to much except I had some issues with my mom. Still do actually. My relationship with the rest of my family has gotten better since I have been college.

I hope things get better with your family one day as well.
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realARTIZT Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
"What will it take to just be found?"
...That question has been going through my head for some time now. Well written and designed piece as always and very heartfelt obviously. I think I'd rather be different than to be lost in the crowd, you know? Who was ever great that wasn't "different"? Awesome poetry- Will be reviewing your other submissions in the near future! Keep on writing :)
- Founder of #SayItHere
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Invoking Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so very much~ :meow: It's an honor.
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uses4insanity Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
The moment you accept yourself and stop giving two dog turds what others think of you, is when you will find your own happiness. I went through high school being a nerd and a jock. You just have to own who you are and screw people who think less of you. This is where you'll find your true friends. Life is scary, but you cannot go about it hiding the rest of your life, pretending to be someone you are not.

As for parents, I could never figure mine out either.

Good Luck...
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KuraiTenshiV Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Hobbyist
I still love this poem =)
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alakazam15161 Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013
Just....wow....this is very well done.
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Invoking Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much~ :heart:
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TeukkiSS Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Hobbyist
don't search the acceptance among people who won't accept YOU as you are. be who you are, do what you want and the people who will accept you can see behind the fake mask you're hiding behind. being alone isn't as lonely as being in wrong company. embrace the person you are~ someday i hope you can do that, it might not be easy, but it's worth it.
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DropFromTheOcean Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013
"Different"? They just don't understand that you're unique. And if your friends don't like poetry and think it's lame, why do you still hang around them? (Sorry if it's harsh but it's a legitimate question...)
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DebiRose Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013
I truly look forward to reading more of your work. Thank you for sharing.
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DebiRose Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013
Emotions are powerful things. To be able to tap into them and share them with the rest of the world is a rare talent. Fow one so young you show scarily great talent.
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segura2112 Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Student Digital Artist
So EFING raw and powerful. Thank You
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Michel-le-fou Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Professional Writer
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Several points have stood out with me. The former is thatyou have used old paper texture as a background, which I used in dissimilar submissions. The latter is the structure, the stylistics--length and rhyme of lines, formation of stanzas. These appeared sound and effective enough to me. That "friends" laugh and deride is an old malaise that I suffered in secondary school frequently. Rings abell buthardly painful nowadays. Good job.
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SecretlyFading Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Student Writer
It's hard to find acceptance yes, but it won't always be forever. You'll meet people who will accept you as you are :)

A beautiful piece by the way, the font is amazing also.
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Ashbee56 Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wonderful piece. If people can't accept you for who you are, then they aren't true friends. High school is a tough place (Trust me, I am far past my years there but I still remember them) but it get better. You will find people that love your art and appreciate you for the beautiful person that you are.

Don't stop writing, the world needs more poets like you ^.^
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ThornsofPurpleRoses Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Very powerful! This seriously gave me chills!

Pertaining to your description: If your "friends" don't support your passions, they are NOT your friends at all! My own family made fun of me for being a "nerd" just because school came easy to me and you know what? I have 6 siblings and I am the only one in college. I am the only one who graduated high school with honors. I am the only one with a promising future. You do you. Don't worry about what anyone else will think of you. The only thought that will ever matter is them wishing they were you when you are at the top and all they can see is your ass above them. And at that point, they're in perfect position to kiss it!

Stick it out and you'll be amazed how thick your skin really is. The only person who can judge you is YOU! :hug:
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EmoRapunzel Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is absolutely amazing, darling. You never cease to amaze me :heart:
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Invoking Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, amor~ :heart: You know you helped a lot, so don't be afraid to take that credit :meow:
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EmoRapunzel Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Nuuuuu, I just put in my two cents a little bit. That's all ene
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Si1VeR-ReBoRn Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013   Writer
I love the strong imagery and you have talent gr8 job!
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Invoking Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much <3
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Si1VeR-ReBoRn Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013   Writer
Ur welcome!
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SongbirdofFrenzy Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wonderful poetry. You have talent, and support <3 Love it.
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Invoking Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very, very much <3 That means the world to me :heart: :meow:
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SongbirdofFrenzy Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem :D Someone that can put something I've been similarly thinking into words so beautifully deserves all the kudos I can offer <3
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Invoking Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm sorry that you've been having thoughts like this ono I'm just glad that you enjoyed it so~ IT means the world to me <3
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SongbirdofFrenzy Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I hope you write more! It's beautiful.
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Invoking Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I will certainly be writing more~ Tis what I love to do.
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lizzieSa Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013
It's hard not to be able to share your dreams with anyone from the people around you, those who you care for.
This poem sure has a "truthful essence"... :/
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Invoking Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Unfortunately, yes... I believe it does :/
Thanks.
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lizzieSa Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013
Anyways, you should chace your dreams, since you sure have some great talent here! :)
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dashita-tichou Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I'm a high school sophomore. My English is 7th period... This poem is really touching and I love it even more than I do the other ones.
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Invoking Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much. And you keep your head up and push through school - it'll be over before you know it. I already wish I could go back and restart my freshman year. I didn't take it as serious as I should have.
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dashita-tichou Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Well, I kinda failed Chemistry this past semester and I blew off English class so I pretty much screwed myself over, especially bad because I'm in four honors courses... And you're a ninja with these responses, you know that?
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Invoking Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hmhm~ x3 I am a ninja at heart too e-e but dont tell anybody.
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dashita-tichou Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
O.O
Woot!^^ Now I have a super awesome ninja friend! XD
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